Writing task 1

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres.

Intro: paraphrasing

Overview: general statement : Peveril Centre: the great evaluation of three health centre.

Specific:

1)      Peveril Centre:

2)      Marchbank Centre / Longston Centre:

 

è Answer

The given table illustrates the patient evaluation for various aspect of services at three medical centres; Longston Centre, Peveril Centre, Marchbank Centre, on the scale of 1 to 10; 1 means very poor and 10 means excellent service.

Overall, Peveril Centre was the top rates of those three centres, which is 8.3, while the number of average rates for Marchbank Centre and Lonston Centre are 7.2 and 5.8, respectively.

Regarding of Peveril Centre where has the greatest score, ‘Response to concerns’ is occupied 9.6, the greatest score among the evaluation aspects. Following that, ‘Booking appointments’ accounted 9.1, the second greatest score while ‘Pharmacy’ was the lowest rate, 6.3.

Marchbank Centre scored 7.2, the highest rate is 8.4 for ‘Doctors’ service’, while the lowest rate is 5.8 for ‘Pharmacy’. On the other hand, Lonston Centre scored 5.8, whose the highest rate is 8 for ‘Doctors’ service’, while the lowest rate is 4.3 for ‘Response to concerns’.

 

è Model answer

The table shows that there are significant differences in patients’ perceptions of quality of provision at the three health centres.

By far the most highly rated is the Peveril Centre with an overall mean of 8.3 and the highest scores in all services areas.

The weakest performing centre overall was Lonston at just 5.8, with Marchbank between the two at 7.2

It is noticeable that one aspect – Doctors’serveice – received relatively strong evaluations in all three centres, with scores ranging from 8 to 8.7.

Pharmacy received the poorest ratings of the services in all the centres: at 5.1, 6.3 and 5.8 at Longston, Peveril and Marchbank respectively.

Regarding the other aspects of provision, there is considerable variation.

Perhaps the most striking differential in ratings is in Response to concerns, which for Peveril is the highest scoring of all the aspects, at 9.6.

This compares with 6.5 for this area at Marchbank and just 4.3 at Lonston.

Ratings for Care and children are moderate in all three centres, though they are significantly lower for Longston than for the other two: 6.3, compared to 7.5 at Peveril and 7.3 at Marchbank.

·       Table analyzing is the first: what is the highest and what is the lowest. What is the similarity?

·       There are significant differences in~ / patients’ perceptions of quality of provision / The highest rate / The most highly rated / the highest scoring of all the aspects / with an overall mean(average) of … / the weakest performing centre overall / at just … / it is noticeable that / received the poorest ratings of the services in all the centres / the most striking differential in ratings / This compares with / They are significantly lower for @ than for  the other two…

·       Account for / occupy / stand at / take up / constitute / comprise :

 

è Modified version

The given table illustrates the rating from the patient for various aspect of services at three medical centres; Longston Centre, Peveril Centre, Marchbank Centre, on the scale of 1 to 10; 1 means very poor and 10 means excellent service.

Overall, Peveril Centre occupied the top mean rates among those three centres with the most highly rated on ‘Response to concerns’, while that for Marchbank Centre and Lonston Centre are relatively low.

In detail, Peveril Centre received significantly great evaluation on ‘Response to concerns’ and ‘Booking appointment at 9.6 and 9.1, respectively. The weakest aspect of service there was ‘Phamacy’, scoring 6.3, which is, nevertheless, the better score than the other two medical centre on this. ‘Doctors’ service’ and ‘Care of children’ are relatively moderate in Peveril Centre, accounting 8.7 and 7.5, each.

Turning to Marchbank Centre, it got evaluation with the overall score of 7.2, whose ‘Doctors’ service’ is the highest score at 8.4, while ‘Pharmacy’ ranked the lowest with 5.8. Moreover, Lonston Centre unfortunately received the poorest ratings with the overall mean, 5.8. Their highest rate of all services’ aspect is ‘Doctors’ service’ at 8, while the lowest rate of that is ‘Response to concerns’ at 4.3.

 

The line graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The given graph illustrates how the mean monthly prices of three metals; Copper, Nickel and Zinc had changed in 2014.

Overall, the costs of Copper and Zinc had moderate changes during the given year, while those of Nickel had significantly extreme fluctuation in 2014.

In detail, Nickel increased 6% in price in January of 2014 compared with previous month, which gradually increased price until in May. After then, comparing with May, Nickel costs dramatically fell down in June with -3% changes, which after -1% changes continued from July to September. With -2% changes in cost in October, compared with September, cost changes were recovered as 1% change during the last two months.

Turning to Copper, there was relatively moderate differences in price changes. It increased slowly between in January and April, which followed by declining 0.5% change in May, comparing with April. It reduced until June, which after it started to climb in July at 1% change. It remains to increase gradually until the end of the year. Regarding of Zinc, cost had changed steadily from January to May, after which the cost change started to decrease from July with -1% contrasted with May. The change remained to had minus changes over the following three months, which then had a reverse again from November and December with 1.5% and 2% changes.

è Model answer

From the line graph, we can see the average monthly rise or fall in how much copper, nickel and zinc cost throughout 2014.

Overall, nickel started with the highest percentage change of the three but ended with the lowest. Zinc started with the smallest change and ended with the highest, and copper prices fluctuated. Prices for all three metals dipped in June. ( overall, percentage changes fell at the beginning of the year, remained static from July to September and rose after October to the end of the year.)

In January the price of nickel was up six per cent, but this dropped to negative three percent in June, ending the year with a one percent increase in both November and December.

Copper began the year with an increase of two percent and by May, the price was dropping by slightly less than one per cent.

It rose again, increasing by a percentage point in July, August and September. Zinc saw its most dramatic increase in February, with three per cent and the price fell in June (a one percent decrease). The change, was negative until October and November when it began to rise.

·       Throughout 2014 = all through the year / the highest percentage change = the largest change / Negative X percent / at the beginning of the year / at the end of the year.

·       Lack at the superitives; highest and lowest ( nickel has the highest and the lowest) – comparitives.

·       Similarity!! In June, changes dropped in all three metals.

·       The price of ~ was up @%, but this dropped to @%, ending the year with @% increase in ~

·       Change = vary = modify = alter = shift = transit

è Revised answer

The given graph illustrates how the percentage of mean monthly prices of three metals; Copper, Nickel and Zinc had changed throughout 2014.

Overall, the percentage of cost changes on Copper and Zinc were varied moderately during the given period, while those on Nickel had relatively extreme fluctuation all through the year.

In detail, Nickel increased as 6% change in price in January compared with previous month, which gradually increased price until in May. After then, comparing with May, cost change of Nickel dramatically fell down in June with -3% changes, which after -1% changes continued from July to September. With -2% changes in October, compared with September, cost changes were recovered as 1% change during the last two months.

Turning to Copper, there was relatively moderate differences in price changes. It increased slowly between in January and April, which followed by declining at 0.5% change in May, comparing with April. It reduced until June, which after it started to climb in July at 1% change. It remains to increase gradually until the end of the year. Regarding of Zinc, cost had changed steadily from January to May, after which the percentage of the cost change started to decrease from July with -1% contrasted with May. The change remained with minus changes over the following three months, which then had a reverse again from November and December with 1.5% and 2% changes.

The bar chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spend doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

è answer

The given chart illustrates how many hours tourists from four different countries spent doing leisure activities during their vacation in Greece in August 2019.

Overall, Chinese tourists spent the longest time reading books, while tourists from Turkish and Brazilian spent most of their time at the beach. In addition, all the tourists spent shorter time visiting places than other activities.

In detail, Chinese and American tourists spent most of their time reading books, 8 hours and 5 hours each. Tourists from China and the USA also spent their time at the beach for 3 hours and 4 hours, relatively. Similarly, they spend the least time visiting places during 1 hour for Chinese and 3 hours for American.  

Turning to Turkish and Brazilian tourists, they are almost same trend to use their leisure time during holiday. The biggest number of hour were spent being at the beach, 5 hours for Turkish and 6 hours for Brazilian, while the smallest number of hour were spent going places, 3 hours and 2 hours each. Identically, they both read books for 4 hours.

è Model answer

The bar chart compares the amount of time each day that people from four different countries spent doing activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. The activities were going to the beach, visiting different attractions, and reading.

Overall, the tourists spent the most time reading books while they spent the least time visiting places. The Chinese tourists spent the longest reading books with the total of eight hours per day. By contrast, the Brazilians spent the longest at the beach with a total of six hours.

Both the American and the Turkish tourists spent the same number of hours every day visiting places with a total of three hours each. Similarly, the Turkish and Brazilian groups spend a total of four hours each reading books. The Chinese tourists spent twice the amount of time reading books as the Turkish and Brazilian tourists, whereas the American and Turkish groups spent three times the amount of time visiting places as the Chinese group.

·       Amount of time / visiting places = visiting different attractions = sightseeing / reading books = reading / going to the beach = at the beach

·       The activities were ~ing, ~ing and ~ing.

·       with the total of eight hours per day. ( average number )

·       By contrast,

·       Chinese tourist = Chinese group.

·       Similar = alike = like = close to

·       How varied = no time difference / how changed = time difference

è Revised answer

The given chart illustrates how many hours tourists from four different countries (China, America, Turkey and Brazil) spent doing leisure activities during their vacation in Greece in August 2019. The activities were doing sightseeing, reading and going to the beach.

Overall, it is clearly seen that Chinese tourists spent the longest time reading books, while tourists from Turkish and Brazilian spent mostly at the beach. In addition, all the tourists spent shorter time visiting places than other activities.

In detail, Chinese and American tourists spent most of their time reading books, 8 hours and 5 hours each. Tourists from China and the USA also went to the beach each day for 3 hours and 4 hours, relatively. Similarly, they spend the least time visiting places during 1 hour for Chinese and 3 hours for American.  

Turning to Turkish and Brazilian tourists, they were nearly alike trend to use their leisure time during holiday. The biggest number of hours for activities were on being at the beach, 5 hours for Turkish and 6 hours for Brazilian, while the smallest number of them were on going places, 3 hours and 2 hours each. Identically, they both read books for 4 hours each day.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

Time difference à how changed ?? no!! it is just the predictions!

The given charts illustrates that how the percentage of energy capacity in gigawatts in 2015 varied and that of forecasting for 2040.

Overall, Fossil fuels accounted the majority of energy volume in 2015, while those of prediction less occupied in 2040, increasing the proportion of Solar and Wind energy. Also, the total amount of energy capacity would be roughly doubled.

In detail, in 2015,

Turning to ,